How could I forget her? I still remember when we were on that bus to Besut. The trip was filled with odd yet wonderful memories. But there was this one sight that I could never ever forget for the rest of my life. We were on the bus. We talked about everything - and I didn't even care about the people around us. Just hearing her voice speak and seeing her smile made me asked her more questions just to avoid her from stopping. It was just before Maghrib, the bus was heading south and the sun was setting. She was sitting in the seat on the left lane while I sat opposite to her. As the sun began fall along the right side of the bus, she admired the beautiful sunset. The golden rays of the sun were just incredible. I don't know if she realized it or not, but I watch her smile as she gazed upon this magnificent scene. As the golden rays of the sun fell upon her rosy cheeks, the mere sight made me think twice to even look away. Her glittering eyes and sweet dimpled smile made me wish for the moment to stay the way it is, forever.
Gatal. Bhahahahahahaha~~~
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ReplyDeleteOn a bus journey, you met someone who touched your senses, you admired her beauty and you couldn't take your eyes off her. Basically, this is the story.
ReplyDeleteWere her smile and eyes really that captivating to leave an everlasting impression on your memory (~.^)? This question is not prompted by skepticism or jealousy (lol...). The simple fact is that I fail to imagine how attractive she was. In my imagination, she looks beautiful but her image is blurry, and it's difficult to share your amazement at her beauty.
I wonder. What is this story trying to tell us? What is the message it wants to send out? On a bus journey, you met someone who touched your senses, you were admiring her beauty and you couldn't take your eyes off her. So?
Unless there is a continuation to illustrate this golden moment as unforgettable, it does not seem to give you any impact so profound as the words claim to be.
As a whole, the incident revolves around how attractive she was - her smile, eyes and rosy cheeks, and how perfect she was, including her voice, that you asked some useless questions (lol...)just to keep her talking. She might have impressed you, but I think she is not that influential to impress readers. In another way of saying this, she is a character who lives in only imagination, not a living person who inspires a story writing.
There are a few reasons why I feel she is not real. First, it could be that her physical beauty is not given accurate and vivid description. What is good is brought to our attention but what is not so good is silenced; second, she is idealised; third, this incident lives in only imagination, and the imagination is too perfect to make it sound real.